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In this age of evolved technology, it feels as if the sky has turned black. As if, darkness had taken over; leaving us in this never-ending nightmare. "Peace" just seems like a fabrication of reality that the ones controlling our country use. They use the word "peace" to get their way with the people. They say that they're working for the better future of our country. What a load of crap. Them? Working for our betterment? That's just a load of crap.

When children would be born in this country, the countdown would begin for the day when they would grow 10 years old. The age when children would get their Birth-Marks which was a symbol of their Second Birth; the day when a child had a Birth-Mark planted in his or her body. A Birth-Mark was a device that the government used to keep track of the child. From the age of 10 till they died, they knew everything about him or her. It's as if they even held control over the child's heartbeat. There isn't any way for a child to escape the Birth-Day. Leaving the country is out of question, as the government has the city to be isolated from all other countries. One could enter, but could not leave again which was this country's, Berath's, curse and along it... our curse too.
I had this idea stuck inside my head for a while now and wanted to write it down. I am still to do some editing to it but after two months of inactivity I just wanted to post something.

Would appreciate some feedback on it. Thank you.
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Dark-Rosa Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012
It is slightly confusing, but it sounds very interesting. ^^ ANd you always have the best word choices~ lol I can't wait to read more from you
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:icontsuki-ya:
tsuki-ya Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Haha, Notte has much better vocabulary than me. And thank you for the compliments. Always great to read messages from you. Not saying that I love it when you compliment my works.... indirectly. xD

Anyway, always good to hear from you.
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:icondark-rosa:
Dark-Rosa Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012
You still have good vocabulary ^^ indirect compliments are the best though~
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tsuki-ya Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Again, I thank you for your compliments. :)
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shadowsmokeandfire Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It sounds interesting, but it's a little for me confusing without some sort of explanation. Dystopian Lit fan?
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tsuki-ya Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah, I know its a little confusing because I just presented the view of the protagonist without any explanation. I'll edit it soon to make it more clear.

You can say that I am. Dystopian gives me a feeling of what my country is going through so I just got into it recently you could say.
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